Reflective Essay
Bob Payne: A traveler man
By Derek Alger
Published on Feb. 1st, 2011
http://www.pifmagazine.com/2011/02/bob-payne-a-traveling-man
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“Bob Payne: A traveler man” by Derek Alger is about author's encounter with Bob Payne, and how he changes the view about traveling. The author created trustworthy tone by using diction, syntax, and irony.
“Specializes”, that is one of the diction that Alger uses to describe Payne. By using that word, he generates the feeling of comfortable and reliable. In addition, he states that Payne’s traveling was “simply astounded”, thus showing his personal feelings without hiding it, thus making audiences feel relaxed.
Syntax is another technique that Alger used to create trustworthy tone. He alled his home “safe”, which creates warm feelings toward the audiences since they will be thinking about their own homes, also. In addition, he states that while he did not travel much, he still was “curious”, Thus reassuring audiences of his position. This further makes audiences comfortable
“He pulled out his pistol and put the barrel to his head”, that is one of the examples of imagery that Alger used. By saying like that, Alger was able to create “awe” feelings for him, making him both brave and trustworthy.
Because Alger constructed this tone, I support Alger’s decision of traveling around. In addition, since this essay generates positive feelings, I feel that the narrator is trust worthy.
This essay’s tone would be appropriate for AP essay for it is formal and that it generates comfortable and reliable feelings for the readers. The tone stays throughout the whole story, thus creating more stable.
Pass.
답글삭제Good job, you have all the required elements. Next time, I would try to make this more like an essay and less like your checking off things from a list (if that made any sense). It just seems a little choppy. Other then that, good job.
PASS. I agree with Tabea; the style of this is a little fragmented. Also, make sure to proof these before you post them. I think you were were trying to say something else and then changed your mind on the last sentence, for example. It isn't logical.
답글삭제Pass. There are a quite a few things here you could improve upon. First, try looking back over some of the sheet we have on syntax. In your discussion of syntax, you cite only single words and talk about their effect. This is actually diction, not syntax. Try talking about the grammatical elements of the sentences and their effect.
답글삭제In addition, you have several instances where your writing doesn't make sense. For example: " and the traveling." I would suggest proofreading your essays before posting them. Possibly try reading it out loud to yourself. I find that if I actually hear the words, then I can pinpoint exactly what parts of my writing are awkward or use faulty idiom.